Comments on: Please critique my book! Is it good? Would you read it?

By: Austinj

Austinj — Wed, 17 Feb 2010 23:05:59 +0000

What is she?
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By: Sarah W

Sarah W — Wed, 17 Feb 2010 22:51:59 +0000

You got my attention right away but definitely lost my attention by the "This is her house?" line. You have quite a few sentences with elementary structure that makes this seem unsophisticated. Also, you have numerous capitalization and spelling errors. (Aunt is not capitalized when preceded by a possessive pronoun.)
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By: happyonthewater

happyonthewater — Wed, 17 Feb 2010 22:14:59 +0000

I think you have a great way of describing things, I’d read it. I don’t quite get the prologue – who’s Lucas? And what is the connection between the prologue and the first chapter. Besides that, I could really feel what Riley Anne was feeling, could picture the aunt’s home. You have a good way of making the reader feel like they are there, with the characters in the story.
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By: Cello

Cello — Wed, 17 Feb 2010 21:46:59 +0000

sweetness.
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By: Albert Lleshi

Albert Lleshi — Wed, 17 Feb 2010 21:39:59 +0000

it sounds like a really good book and i would really enjoy reading it
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